11/09/2007

Okutsu Japan

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20 big eyes


houses with eyes
to watch
as autumn deepens





34 eyes in wall


ooo ooo ooo ooo ooo ooo ooo ooo ooo ooo ooo




22 reflecting water




amazing autumn -
the red wall dances
with the waves




31 water on wall








autumn brook -
the silence of sunshine
on stones

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My PHOTO ALBUM from Okutsu Autumn 2007


Read my Haiku Archives from 2007

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Beautiful Lake

26 midday sunshine


奥津湖の
銀波に映える
紅葉かな

Okutsu lake
red leaves reflected
in silver waves


Sakuo Nakamura



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6 comments:

sakuo said...

How beautiful the red wall that is shining from wave moving.

sakuo.

Anonymous said...

woooooooooooow

just like eyes
boooooooooooooooow


etsuko

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Anonymous said...

or the eyes of people watch because
it is getting colder outside


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Gabi Greve said...

a house with eyes... now this is cool, Gabi. There is something
scary about it too.

It seems to me you have caught the haunting spirit of Edgar Allen
Poe's, "The House of the Seven Gables", a horror story if ever there was,in just THREE lines of verse in a haiku.

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Thanks, my friend from Canada.
GABI

facebook said...

Let me suggest to you minor changes to your poem:

ablazing autumn...
red walls dance
with waves


In English poetry the strategic use of articles is more "poetic". Your original has a strong image I very much enjoy... autumn...red... waves. I hope my suggestion is helpful.
Chibi

facebook said...

autumn...
lake waves reflect
on a red wall

Chibi

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